Kevin's poem is called What is a Good Friend, it is a warm and powerful poem I've heard from his recitation. For his analysis, he did a great job on the introduction paragraph, which is the first paragraph. He relates his experiences and feelings towards the poem, which I think is a good idea to start off with. He also mentioned some lessons that are related to the poem about friendship. Moreover, he gave some explanations to why he chooses this poem and how he had this same question as the title—What is a good friend?. He also has a great hook by saying "In everyone's life", so people reading this analysis will start off trying to connect their own experiences and ideas to this poem and to Kevin's analysis.
The second paragraph was also well done, because he tried predict and infer to how the author wanting to present the poem by not telling his opinion about friendship as the topic, but telling it step by step later on within the poem. The analysis's organization is also good since he wrote it clear for the reader to understand by giving short explanations right after a sentence he quoted from the poem. For the third paragraph, he started to explain the structures of the poem. Overall, he fulfilled all the requirements Ms. Guarino have asked for on the blog, both the poem's meaning and structure are given in his analysis.
On the other hand, something that I think Kevin should improve on and do better on is for the second paragraph explaining the meaning of the poem. I think he could give some deeper meaning of the poem rather than explaining it in a easier way. Also, he could add in his own definition for friendship and what a good friend should be like to compare and contrast with the author's idea. He could tell about how he agrees to it or not. He could also add in some background informations about the poem. Another thing to be improved in this analysis will be the thesis. I could not find any specific sentence as a thesis statement, so I think it will be better to come up with a thesis statement even though it's a analysis writing. Another advice I want to give is to list out some literature devices the author have used in this poem in the starting of the paragraph about structures, so it will be easier and more clear; Moreover, this sentence could be presented as the topic sentence for the third paragraph mainly discussing about the poem's structure. Otherwise and most likely he did a great job on his analysis for the poem What is a Good Friend.
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